This was amazing and Ioved every step of the journey. I couldn't imagine having a job like his. And as much as I want to say I hate him, I also love him. It's a love hate relationship and man why did you have to do that? Amazing work!
Harlan is a character I specifically wanted to feel nuanced. He's a bad person (imo) but you also get a direct channel to his internal feelings, so it becomes easier to understand his thought processes. Like even if you can't condone his actions, you understand them. There's also a lot of conflict internally, but a lot of that changes as we go along. Maybe not redemption exactly, but close. Idk
I had a feeling from the start that he was going to use her to his advantage and that the other girl would be dead but I was just hoping that maybe I was wrong. I cannot wait to read the next part! You have me sooo hooked! Awesome writing!
I wondered if Harlan would go back for his brother. I am really hoping that he makes it back to Suzanne, Gemma and Trouble, to know happiness once more if it's in him to let go and let it in. I have a feeling this may not end well for him though. Fingers crossed I'm wrong.
Being entirely honest, I have been actively trying to murder Harlan for a long time now, but he's a slippery little mofo. I had it in my mind that he would die when began expanding this story from the original two parts, but I'm not so sure anymore. He might live. He might die. I still do not know. I don't hate him or anything btw. I just don't know if he has it in him to stop being so whiny and live an actual life. Got a little Bojack syndrome.
I can see and understand that perspective of Harlan not being able to live what some of the others may consider a normal life. I wondered that myself. And would he even allow himself to? He's already done it again and walked away. He allows himself to feel just that sliver of happiness, but doesn't feel like a guy like him deserves it.
See, I've been really worried about the way that Harlan may be perceived as a character. I understand him as a person and I've taken a lot of time to paint him as very sympathetic, but it's also important to remember that the story opens with him sacrificing a girl to a demon. He's not just a morally gray character. He's a bad person. This story has been me trying to see if I could take a character like that, make him sympathetic and potentially turn him around. It's somewhat working imo. I just wish I could write it better lol. Idk. It has a lot to do with me sticking myself directly into the mind of Harlan because he's the narrator. In the future, I'll probably take a more objective approach when writing things within this world and go third-person.
This was amazing and Ioved every step of the journey. I couldn't imagine having a job like his. And as much as I want to say I hate him, I also love him. It's a love hate relationship and man why did you have to do that? Amazing work!
Harlan is a character I specifically wanted to feel nuanced. He's a bad person (imo) but you also get a direct channel to his internal feelings, so it becomes easier to understand his thought processes. Like even if you can't condone his actions, you understand them. There's also a lot of conflict internally, but a lot of that changes as we go along. Maybe not redemption exactly, but close. Idk
I had a feeling from the start that he was going to use her to his advantage and that the other girl would be dead but I was just hoping that maybe I was wrong. I cannot wait to read the next part! You have me sooo hooked! Awesome writing!
Thanks!
Wow! Just wow!🤯
Thanks!
More?
There is more.
Need more please. Love this.
Thank you! I will definitely be posting more parts on here, but I've already posted more on The Cryptic Compendium if you wanted more right away.
Whew! What a ride! Thank you!
No, thank you! I appreciate the comment.
Notes
I wondered if Harlan would go back for his brother. I am really hoping that he makes it back to Suzanne, Gemma and Trouble, to know happiness once more if it's in him to let go and let it in. I have a feeling this may not end well for him though. Fingers crossed I'm wrong.
Being entirely honest, I have been actively trying to murder Harlan for a long time now, but he's a slippery little mofo. I had it in my mind that he would die when began expanding this story from the original two parts, but I'm not so sure anymore. He might live. He might die. I still do not know. I don't hate him or anything btw. I just don't know if he has it in him to stop being so whiny and live an actual life. Got a little Bojack syndrome.
I can see and understand that perspective of Harlan not being able to live what some of the others may consider a normal life. I wondered that myself. And would he even allow himself to? He's already done it again and walked away. He allows himself to feel just that sliver of happiness, but doesn't feel like a guy like him deserves it.
See, I've been really worried about the way that Harlan may be perceived as a character. I understand him as a person and I've taken a lot of time to paint him as very sympathetic, but it's also important to remember that the story opens with him sacrificing a girl to a demon. He's not just a morally gray character. He's a bad person. This story has been me trying to see if I could take a character like that, make him sympathetic and potentially turn him around. It's somewhat working imo. I just wish I could write it better lol. Idk. It has a lot to do with me sticking myself directly into the mind of Harlan because he's the narrator. In the future, I'll probably take a more objective approach when writing things within this world and go third-person.
So well written!
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