Advice from a well-done smoothbrain, garnish and cook the meat with mushrooms to absorb the juices and then squeeze them out on top of the meat for maximum flavour :)
So looking at your first paragraph, it kinda goes all over the place on being descriptive or not. Most sentences are descriptive, but some are not. It creates a weird pacing going in. It's okay to have this mix, but you need a pattern to compensate. A reader should feel like the can follow where the mood will go without having already read the sentences (this is easy to miss as the author since you already know where it's going).
Explain cuz i am a dumbass
He's watching you slowly drive yourself to suicide by not dealing with your emotions
Mary her immediately
Why is this actually unsettling 😭
It's a memetic kill agent
[MEMETIC AGENT ACTIVATED]
This man loves ginger
Puff
Puff
This is tower, lane 420 is yours, you are clear for takeoff Happy flying
i’d beat my meat and it’d finally be hard for once
No, you wouldn't just beat your meat, you'd defeat it
I think I cut myself a little on all that edge
Yes, what a great day to develop some parasites.
I'd challenge you to find a day that isn't great to get parasites
Advice from a well-done smoothbrain, garnish and cook the meat with mushrooms to absorb the juices and then squeeze them out on top of the meat for maximum flavour :)
Or don't do cooking gymnastics and just eat something that's not a charcoal briquette
You're screwing with me, you've got to be
You have a hibernation pod??
It's called a bed and no will to live
Nice try fbi
You've losst me
Man I ain't jackin off rn, what're the- ohhh normal people uses
Very nice.
Cool! Any specific lines/sections you can point to? And any suggestions on how I can combat this?
So looking at your first paragraph, it kinda goes all over the place on being descriptive or not. Most sentences are descriptive, but some are not. It creates a weird pacing going in. It's okay to have this mix, but you need a pattern to compensate. A reader should feel like the can follow where the mood will go without having already read the sentences (this is easy to miss as the author since you already know where it's going).
Hey, may I dm you so we can go a little bit more in depth?
Nah! It looks good! Honestly, as long as you clean and trim it, you should let it grow out a little more
"A splash of cum to seal the deal?"
[selects do not] [selects do not] [selects do not] [selects do not]
I see the Montana shirt
”I like sand, it’s smooth and soft and comforting and it’s very easy to contain.”
"I like sand. It's fine, it's comforting, it's warm, and it gets in the strangest of places as a little reminder of home"
This is everything I need in a person
Pardon?
You heard me
[удалено]
(we both just googled that huh?)
[удалено]
Well I guess I'll just have to be your partner then
who is he?
Theodore J Kaczynsky
Imagine, if you will
And the dead men come marching again
OSOWIEC, THEN AND AGAIN! ATTACK OF THE DEAD, HUNDRED MEN!"